Re: I'm thinking of creating a sign for my car for car shows and similar endeavors.

Posted by Mr.Pushbutton  On 2011/4/1 11:41:02

You have air bags listed twice (department of redundancy department).
I would word the entire document differently, you are speaking to the "man on the street", not the dyed-in-the wool enthausiast, so you have to be careful. You would be suprised to know how many people don't know that cars did not always come with seat belts, air bags, air conditioning, etc. The way it is worded it is possible to construe that those features were available but not ordered.

I used to write labels for a museum, I had 150 words allowed to tell them everything we thought they needed to know about a given car, written from a perspective that the general public does not know much about history (very true if they are American born and bred) and that they don't understand that $5,000 in 1956 is not the same as $5,000 today.
We always included the average annual income for the model year of the car, you can get that online fairly easy from the US Census bureau website.

Hold tight, I'm working on an alternate version for you, I'll finish it tonight. Luch hour is over, back to the salt mine!